Reflection on Pt 2 Draft

Here are the two drafts I reviewed:

By Aaron Jatana
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kga9twc8EUUOZlvxsu0uWg5uNt2WK51_Lq6vrlayOGI/edit

By Selena Carbajal
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Fn_sneh5jgpeg3V8c4xlzTzPUA9i2GAC6TT81xNnIlM/edit

The readers of this essay will be well-informed public citizens who are aware of and concerned about social issues, especially in the global arena. Students and instructors are, for the most part, included.

My readers may have biases about conflict, photojournalism as a profession, and suicide. In telling plainly the events that occurred, I am giving the readers the respect by not going much beyond the facts themselves, as that can lead to hyperbole and manipulation. The facts are difficult to hear for those that are sensitive to these issues, and the best way I can think of to approach this is to let the message speak for itself.

 Truth, integrity, selflessness, and service to others are their values and expectations. I'm meeting both of these by giving them a wider perspective and a clearer picture of what happened. Context is an extremely important factor here. The humane qualities of the photog emerge as the facts unfold, which brings sympathy and open-mindedness to his plight.

Because this story is rooted in another culture that is drastically different from American culture, certain kinds of information are needed for understanding. Because of the scope of the reading audience, it would be more effective to give as much cultural context as possible, while at the same time, limiting phrases that are too technical or are irrelevant to this context.

The story's facts speak very much for themselves, so compelling, yet simple, language is appropriate. This article wouldn't be appropriate for anyone not mature enough to understand the situation and its implications.

The tone should be somber and respectful, yet quietly intense. This tone would be most effective if used throughout, as the situation that Kevin Carter was in is ongoing with no end in sight, and there's no room for a uplifting conclusion. The tone should fit the subject matter.